Wednesday, November 09, 2005

Rhyming Experiment (On occasion of lightning)

Lightning slams
and sounds
the shatter

Something tells
of loss
and stutters

Lightning slaps
the things
inside

Forever reach
the strings
of mind

4 comments:

D.Macri said...

Nothing reveals like animalistic fear
Nothing is the substance of lightening
Count on uncertainty when you hear
The seconds measure its distance
of pleasure and resistance.

D.Macri said...

hehe, maybe we should all reply poetically all the time. It would solve the riddle of words and expression, as well as bridge the infinite gaps in a most delightfull, inoffensive way.

J C said...

to reply in verse is I agree, less terse, but to make it a rule, is absolutely ridiCUL-ous, unless of course the purpose of the rule is to break it.

now in the past, I have poemed back, and have remained offensive. :)

criticism is violence.

I find it strange that carlos calls this one rhyming experiment, when in fact the experiment is more about rhythm and meter then rhyme, although I guess the two are intertwined, the rhythm and the rhyme.

D.Macri said...

I say
hehe, maybe
it is hardly a rule
the participation makes you drool
rhymrhytm rhythmrhym
do it whenever you want all the time