Friday, October 24, 2008

Leaving

the words are frozen to my tongue
tonight.
here in front of my violet Remington,
amphitheatre of metal letters, relief
eludes me
there is no playing of this field
tonight.

on sullivan street
in the shadow of the towers
in this small cavern of an apartment
where street light shines my skin
day glow and translucent
like those scientific images of babies in the womb
and all I can do is
listen
to the wailing of the fire trucks
in Chinatown, sound of horror instead of alarm,
and I watch
as a ghost makes its way across the crumbling walls
of this apartment, that I hardly recognize
in this light.

7 comments:

Lorne Roberts said...

golly. this is fabulous. you're ripping off my style, though.

ha ha ha. "my" style.

cara said...

ha! maybe it's just the shared origins (neoprairie style) and propensity for anguish.
:)

but seriously all the writers on this blog influence me.

Lorne Roberts said...

yeah, me too.

i gotta re-read this when it's not 2 am and i'm not collis tabernouche exhausted ostie.

Lorne Roberts said...

ok. i just re-read it and it needs some collis edits ostie. like, lots.

to me, it seems like this is a first draft. or almost. maybe a first draft with some basic edits.

but it's good.

but it needs more edits.

but i'm too tabernouche exhausted right now.

another day, or over the phone.

ok. leave me alone. i'm busy. and i gotta sleep.

cara said...

ouch.
you can't take back fabulous.
i feel like Anita's X ray.

cara said...

but of course i agree about the edits.

Lorne Roberts said...

i never took back fabulous. it's still fabulous. it just need some edits to be even more fabulous is all.